So many come and so many go,
Some in summers,some in snow.
On trains,roads,net and Halloween
We do find strangers umpteen.
Bored,frustrated,dejected and sad,
Almost on the verge of going mad,
Comes a stranger with a mighty heart,
Ready to tear all your troubles apart.
Different feelings,different emotions,
Meet them in unexpected situations.
Some just pass,while others click,
To be friends,in times, thin and thick.
So,for you all, I got a small advice,
Though it may hurt certain concise.
Ignore parent's warnings about dangers,
And go on befriending lovely strangers.
Hey,,
ReplyDeletereally nice and simple..Like the simplicity a lot.
But i liked it from the 2nd verse onwards.
the first verse seemed a lil abrupt.
Really liked the last two lines :) koi stranger mil gayi kya ?
ReplyDeleteOn a slightly more critical note, it feels like you have been trying too hard to make the lines rhyme , which makes some of the words/lines feel very abrupt and somewhat discordant. I would suggest that you go with the flow of ur thoughts rather than putting so much emphasis on rhyming. and even if u do insist on rhyming, take some time and think of a line which fits into the flow of the thought.
Keep up the good work dude :) and u owe me a honest comment on my blog :)
It is like saying that an open mind is also a happy one , nice post :)
ReplyDeleteNicely written!
ReplyDeleteNice post, d starting shows that you have tried too hard to rhyme the words.
ReplyDeletebut all in all really sweet n lovely :)
as i too blv i befriending strangers(going by my instinct)
wish it was longer
:)
Thanks all....Points Noted and appreciated:)
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